Passing the Time
Open spaces
banks of trees
rows of houses
playing fields
swollen rivers
fallen leaves
silver pylons
industry
busy tractors
sudden rain
steam the window
up again
cruising the tracks…
cruising the tracks…
cruising the tracks…
cruising the tracks…
Play some music
read a book
write a poem
do some work
bacon sandwich
cup of tea
watch the passing
scenery
watch a movie
play a game
things we do whilst
on the train
passing the time…
passing the time…
passing the time…
passing the time…
Open spaces
banks of trees
rows of houses
playing fields
swollen rivers
fallen leaves
silver pylons
industry
busy tractors
sudden rain
steam the window
up again
cruising the tracks…
cruising the tracks…
cruising the tracks…
cruising the tracks…
Play some music
read a book
write a poem
do some work
bacon sandwich
cup of tea
watch the passing
scenery
watch a movie
play a game
things we do whilst
on the train
passing the time…
passing the time…
passing the time…
passing the time…
4 comments:
This is fantastic Bii. The short lines conjure the images and scenery flashing past, and the repeated phrases actually made the clacking track sounds in my head!
I bet you just rattled this one off really quickly didn't you?
Marvellous.
I agree with ender re the short line imagery and the rhythms - well done.
I also like the occasional rhymes / near rhymes which create a sense of sameness.
This reminds me so much of every long train journey I've been on. They say travel broadens the mind - I find it shrinks it to a pinpoint, excellently captured here. WH Auden would have been proud, would have been proud, would have been proud... (Help!)
Thanks guys - this one was really fun to write, and I had plenty of time (3 hours there, 2 3/4 hours back - thanks Virgin trains!).
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