Here is something that I had about 6 large stanzas of, and ended up distilling it down to this. It's part of the 'Home and Away' theme.
Crackle and groan, shiver and moan,
Shuffle of feet.
Explosion of colour, dynamic motion,
Rocking conceit.
All meaning crushed beneath shiny wheels,
Take me home
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Of course I haven't seen the original but I admire this - it has a lot of impact.
I enjoyed this ender - it's short but dynamic, there's a lot packed into those three short lines.
I liked this. Short and sweet! Would appreciate help on the meaning tho.
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